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Saturday, 11 December 2010

Here in the Garden of Sin by Ooza

Here in the Garden of Sin by Ooza

Summary: Edward has spent his entire existence longing for one thing. When he finally gets it, his carefully construction control starts slipping. It doesn't matter to his savior, she's dying either way. Be careful what you wish for, you just might get it.


Donna_rai says:

This Story has been written by the fantastic O_oza

It is twisted from the very beginning, talk about keeping you on the edge of your seat! It keeps you thinking "What the hell is gonna happen next!"

Not only is this story well written but the author has created a brilliant twist, it has me begging for the next chapter to be here now!!

"As Bella stepped into the downpour, a man suddenly appeared in front of her.Under normal circumstances, she probably would have found him attractive. However, one look into his feral, black eyes sent a chill racing up her spine.
"Come with me", he demanded. His voice, smooth and velvety, caressed each word in a way that shot fear through her body. Bella was frozen, too terrified to move. The man's fingers wrapped around her arm tightly. !now" "

All Edward wants is peace and quiet, but with his mind reading abilities that doesn't come after....that is until he comes across Bella. When Edward tries to read her mind something very strange happens and without realising it he has her in the woods.
Bella finds herself in a most unfortunate predicament the moment she sets eyes on Edward.

The scent of her blood and silent mind are enough to seal her fate!

I wont spoil it but trust me the twist and turns in this story are excellent!!

"What do you want?" She hoped to sound strong, but her voice was only a whisper. The man shook his head slowly. "What did you do to me?" "What" "How are you doing it?" he asked frantically. He started walking towards her. She immediately backed away.
"Leave me alone!" Bella screamed as the man lunged at her."

There is only a handful of fics out there that take me by surprise, and I cant predict whats going to happen next.....this is one of them! I honestly didn't want to stop reading.
I am very excited to see what O_oza has in store for this story, she definitely has a way of leaving you in suspense, and i love it


Lambcullen says:

This kicks off the a very intriguing start. You think you know what is happening, and yet all of a sudden you are thrown into the utter confusion that Edward is feeling. Edward is utterly perplexed by Bella, and that gives him a caustic edge... maybe even cold.

"The only thing he was sure of was that he would eventually stop her heart from beating one way or another."

However, this isn't your usual Darkward story... there is an odd edge to Bella. Something that I cannot wait to reveal itself.

Ooza's description are eerie.

"As Bella stepped into the downpour, a man suddenly appeared in front of her. Under normal circumstances, she probably would have found him attractive. However, one look into his feral, black eyes sent a chill racing up her spine."

"What did you do to me?"

"I can't hear you, Carlisle. I can't hear anyone."

She does an amazing job of conveying Alice's and Edward's gifts, as they integral to this storyline.

Her descriptions of Edward's darkness are chillingly delicious....and yet there is a vulnerabilty that drips through. Edward is just as confused and lost as Bella is, though I don't think many people see this other side to him.

"I'll be sorry?" He laughed then, a sound so sinister that Bella's short-lived bravery crumbled.

She injects a little humor that you don't expect. Verbal banter between the two is excellent. Bella does not buckle easily. So I was snorting rather loudly when I read this line.

"Alice! She's trapped in a house full of vampires. I really don't think she's concerned about Egyptian thread count."

"You don't have to patronize me."

"I would never," he mocked.

"You're an asshole."

I personally feel this is one of the most layered Darkwards I have ever read. We get the thrist for her blood, and yet we ll feel for Edward. It's amazing how the author conveys that.

Without another word, Edward grabbed Bella by the hair and bent her head back. He took a deep breath before bowing his head and pressing his teeth against her neck. They sliced effortlessly into her skin.

Bella wanted to scream, but she was too startled to do anything. Blood streamed down her neck as Edward remained completely motionless. Then he was sucking, pulling the blood from her body. The wound throbbed under the force of his teeth and lips, but it didn't last long.

Edward pushed away from her with a pained cry and with his hand covering his mouth, fled from the room.

I could go on and on about this fic... really, I could. But it's only seven chapters in so far, so why don't you check it out for yourself.

You will not be sorry....


Saturday, 27 November 2010

A Shot in The Dark


By pdd912

This month my recommended one shot is very short and not sweet at all. If you like your Darkward dirty as hell then this should get you going.

Pdd912 is best known for her Multi Chapter fic Into the Grey House, which although it could be said to fall into the category of BDSM is unlike any other such fic in the fandom. What she does best is get into the heart and mind of the submissive.

This story, in barely more than 1K words, describes the chance encounter of a young woman with an enigmatic and strangely beautiful man at a Carnival. With a distant glance they recognize something in each other that draws them together. As the girl allows herself to be lured from her friends the author reveals to us the mentality that requires not just to be humbled but to be humiliated.

“A motion of his hand tells me to get down onto my knees, and I tremble. I can hear the sounds of others outside in the park. The fear of being caught in such a position mingles with the humiliation of being so casually used by him, but my outrage feels more like desire and I find myself kneeling at his feet…”

This is the antithesis of romanticism, consent lies in a very ambiguous area but the confusion is as much in the girl’s own mind as it is in the circumstances. He does not physically or verbally coerce her; yet it is clear on some level she knows she should not be there. It is not in her best interests. It is debasing.

“The shame of my desire seeps from me like bitter honey.”

Her submission resembles that of a religious zealot into self flagellation and humiliating acts, wanting to be used and being exalted by it.

You may well feel the same shame as you read it and enjoy it!

Sunday, 14 November 2010

Maelstrom by Shalu

Maelstrom by Shalu

Summary: Jasper's motorcycle breaks down in the pouring rain. A light in the distance leads him to something he thought he lost, but the discovery may drag him under. SLASH, JxE

Lambcullen says: First of all, I don't read slash. Ever. But something about this fic called out to me, whether
it was the summary, or the amazingly dark banner, I don't know...but I'm not sorry I started it.
I proceeded with caution, worried that I was going to have to stop reading at any moment, but I kept going. Though it's still relatively new, only 5 chapters so far, it sets the scene for a wonderfully dark plot.

Somewhere behind the door, I heard the soft notes of a what I imagined to be a baby grand floating about the house. Something about the melody was familiar and nearly knocked the wind out of me. For a moment, I forgot about the cold, leaning sideways to press my ear to the wood. A strange pressure began building in my chest, rapidly growing uncomfortable. I stepped back.

I blasted through the chapters, wanting to know the back story and what happened between Edward and Jasper. Edward has much so that Jasper is confused and he wants to know more.

"Edward, what happened to you?"

He was so still, not even blinking. When he finally moved to speak, I startled. "I'll get you some dry clothes."

He disappeared then, but after he left, I noticed a fire had been started. Confused, I didn't know what to think. Before I could ponder too long, Edward had returned with a pair of jeans and a dark sweater, setting them on the chair next to me.

"Thank you," I whispered before he left again, shutting the double doors behind him. I tore off my wet clothes quickly, anxious to get to the part where I found out where he'd been for the last ten years. He doesn't look a day over eighteen and—

"Please don't ask me."

With each chapter, another layer of the story is revealed, but then it asks more questions. Shalu gives us flashbacks of their past together, letting us in a little at a time, and yet leaving us hungry for more.

I stared at the receiver for nearly an hour, the "off-the-hook" beep slapping me in the face. Fear and anxiety rippled through me as the bottom seemed to drop out of my life. That was the last time I spoke to the Masens and the first day I considered Edward was never coming back.

Shalu writes an awesome Jasper.

"I'm doing my damnedest to assimilate this folkloric bitchslap, but you seem to be working just as hard to make it more difficult.
Quit tap-dancing around whatever it is that's driving your mercurial moodswings and spit it out! You were always a temperamental prick, but I still loved you ..."

And there are humerous moments, even in the darkest of converstations between them...

"I am hungry," he admitted. "Don't you want to know what ... or who, in particular, I'll be dining on?"

He didn't blink, his wide blackened eyes burning holes through mine. I glared back with as much energy as I had—which, admittedly, wasn't much.

"You could do me the courtesy of giving me a heads up if it's me," I deadpanned. I couldn't really wrap my head around why he was doing this now, or why I was goading him back. "I'll stick an apple in my mouth or something."

There are flashes of an intriguing back story between Alice & Jasper, and like the rest of this fic... I want more. Trust me, it's impressive to have me WANTING more of a slash fic.


DonnaRai says: This is a Fic that I wouldn’t normally go for, as I am not that up to date with the whole Slash genre!
On saying this, I was really surprised with how much I enjoyed this fic.
Maelstrom is only 5 chpts long at the moment, and with reading those 5 chpts it’s safe to say that I was hooked.
The story is based around Edward and Jasper; they haven’t seen each other in about 10yrs, but an unexpected incident sees them alone in Edward’s house!
Being a huge Dark fic fan I like to come across fic’s that capture you right from the very beginning, and Shalu has done this wonderfully. It's haunting and emotional, so in my eyes it’s a job well done!!


My voice had gone hoarse. I tried to clear my throat, but it was scratchy and painful—not unlike the last hour in this room. "I don't know how you expect me to act, Edward! What more do you want?"
Instantly, he was standing nose to nose with me. "I want to kill you."

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Saturday, 30 October 2010

Bloody Choices by Nitareality

Bloody Choices by Nitareality

Summary: In 1347 a great pestilence swept through Europe. The choices that Bella's Father makes set off a string of events he could never have predicted. Dark, vampire Cullens. Mature rating for subject matter, violence and sex.

Donnarai says:

Finding this Fic was like getting a gorgeous new bag (yes, I have a wee bag obsession)!

It has everything!! It's Dark, chilling, tense..... basically, everything i could ever want when looking for a Darkward Fic to read.

This is a history based Fic, and to be honest, I try and avoid Fic's based on this era, but Nitareality is the exception! Her writing is so detailed that it draws me in from the get go.

"Standing in the doorway was a gentleman. He was tall, covered head to toe in a black woolen cloak.
He spoke, his voice commanding, smooth and clear. "Mr. Swan. My name is Edward Cullen.
It would behoove you to allow me entrance, I have a proposition for you." Charlie's eyes shifted to Isabella, not visible to the man as of yet. "I assure you, I won't hurt your daughter."
he visitor was allowed through the entry way. "Yet," the stranger hummed, inaudible to Charlie"

The town is hit by a deadly plague, and Charlie will do anything to proctect Bella even if that mean giving her away to the mysterious Edward Cullen.
Edwards moods give me a serious case of whiplash. One minute you think he is going to play nice, and the next he is so sinister.

"Edward raised his head from Yorkie's drained body, never breaking contact with Bella's eyes.
As he slowly licked the blood from around his lips, his eyes almost black, he smirked at Bella and nodded. "Delicious."

Once again, I wish I was better at writing reviews, because this Fic definetly deserves the best!!


Lambcullen says:

This fic is a prime example that a high word count doesn't mean you get a great story. Nita's chapters are short, but juicy and right to the point. She has a way of wrapping you up in a time where a sneeze could equal your demise.

Like Donna, I'm not a huge fan of period fics, but while the author does such a wonderful job that I'm lost in her words, rather than the time.

Edward stiffened as Alice linked her arm through Bella's, leading her into the house. Isabella's hair swung rhythmically as she walked with Alice, her free flowing waves contrasting wildly with Alice's tight plaits. Isabella was all warm in browns and lighter shades of earth, as all peasants garb tended to be. Alice was a contrast in emerald green silk, her long black plaits hanging stiffly down the middle of her back. Isabella had seemed to relax a touch with Alice, and Edward was annoyed rather than relieved. He would need to make it clear that Isabella was not here to serve as Alice's new plaything! As he stepped into the manor, he heard Alice giggle and speak. "Bella, I'd like to introduce you to our family, we've all been very anxious to meet you."

Edward is dark -- my favorite kind -- but he has a sinister edge that has me salivating.

Isabella had dropped to her knees then, begging. "Please do not make me lead these people to their death. Their blood will be on my hands, the sin of murder on my soul!" Edward was rigid in his opinion that this was to be her job. No chambermaid or other house staff could be trusted to it. The Cullens couldn't risk exposure from the house staff, or the panic that might effect them, rendering them lifeless if they might attempt to flee.

He crouched down, lifting her chin with his hands and glaring into her eyes. "You will do as you are told, my Isabella," he said, in a low voice that contained a hint of a growl. "You will bring the humans to us or I will ensure that you and your father are very sorry."

Nitareality seems to have a gift for writing everything Dark, because she repeats this awesomeness with her fic Little Red Riding Hood.

You won't be sorry checking out any of Nita's fics. I promise. Just make sure you leave the light one, and have your blankie when you read them.

Saturday, 16 October 2010

A Shot in the Dark

Beyond the Pale

This month’s Shot in the Dark is a bit different. When trawling for a good one shot to read often the best hunting ground is competitions. Since we are interested in the Dark fics we thought it would be educational to look at a competition dedicated to just that.

The contest was by picture prompt with the following remit:-

A contest for one-shot stories inspired by images that imply secret desires, habits, and happenings. Fetish and deviance. The forbidden. The socially UNacceptable. What goes onbehind closed doors only. What pushes beyond the pale. The otherwise untouchable. The taboo”

For this months posting I asked all the judges, entrants and any readers who wished to send in short reviews for any story they wished. Here they are divided up by the pictures that inspired them.

I made no attempt to pick which stories should be represented so if you think one has been neglected please add a review for it in the comments.


Silent Signs by LAli-Cat:

Reading "Silent Signs" I felt for Alice's miserable existence. I don't think I like this Jasper very much, he has the power to change Alice and set her free, but he keeps coming back and using her. He doesn't even talk to her! Poor Alice is trapped, during the day haunted by the demons within her own mind, and at night - by useless hope for her red-eyed demon to come and free her. This is a very well written story.

Review by Detochkina

There really is nothing more dangerous than an addiction to another individual. It takes the highs and lows of narcotics and libations to another level, almost unfathomable if you haven’t experienced it yourself. Silent Signs captures Alice’s addiction, by focusing on elements everyone can understand - secrecy, cravings, pushing to elevate the high to the next level. Anxiety until your next fix, the cycle of damage. Just one more...But picks powerful language to really drive home the point that Alice’s addiction to Jasper is even more dangerous than the the presumptions her care takers operate under.

Review by snshyne

The Loved One by Detochkina and Rags88

I’m a much bigger fan of “show”, than I am of “tell”. Narration that is simply “Bella is 22. She and her friend went to school. They were good kids.” Boring. Fine, so you’ve laid a plot bunny out for me. Awesome.

What’s not boring, is taking the time to show readers what each character looks like, through one another’s eyes. Letting me hear the curiosity in a tone of voice instead of just telling me Edward is... curious.

And oh, he is.

The Loved One jumps right into the thick of things and assumes you’re paying enough attention while reading, to answer the questions you have, for yourself. We discover things the way Edward does: fumbling around in the dark, trusting Bella to lead the way.

As they walk, the dark and the quiet doesn’t bother Edward, but the smell does. It’s overwhelmingly, almost sickeningly sweet here...

She extends her hand and pats the wall, looking for something... The round button in the wall is lit up in weak plastic yellow and they can hear the whirling sounds of the hard working motor in the elevator shaft.

Edward has an idea...

Without giving too much away - because I really, really want you to uncover this for yourselves - this Edward is one of the sweettalkin-est, smoothwalkin-est, creepyhot freakweirdos I’ve found (please, please don’t take offense Rags and Detka, I LOVE him. And I mean this in ONLY the best way). His interests are definitely beyond the pale, and it’s the tender (also: hot), careful, and respectful exploration of them that I adore.

Bella’s willingness to explore his controversial interests with him is what made it great.

Here’s something (a place) that’s very personally sacred and intimate (not in a sexual way, but in a close-to-her-heart way) to Bella, and something that’s relentlessly intriguing, taboo, fetishistic, and curious to Edward. Coming to terms to such a paradox within a relationship is bound to be complicated, but I loved how willing and open-minded (and open-hearted) these two characters were with one another.

What they’re exploring is truly dark, but they keep one another in the light.

“There’s nothing wrong with looking, and you promised...”

Between Edward’s brash honesty, painted by a wonderfully foul mouth, and Bella’s softer, gentler version of the same truths, we take “the tour” of what some people accept as a part of life, and others live in fear of. We discover along with them, things that are hidden from most people, until we’re finally exactly where Edward wants to be with his own Loved One.

Sensing her hesitation, he stops, takes her small hand and places it over his heart, covering it with his. Tenderly looking into her eyes, he whispers to her, “Remember, I promised that you can trust me? And to show you that you’re my loved one forever?”

Bella nods again, and Edward breathes next to her alabaster cheek, “Let me.”

Go. Read. Now. And join me, please, in urging the authors toward the continuation they’ve promised. Once you’ve finished the last paragraph, you’ll want it just was much as me.

Review by Yellowglue


The Rabbit and the Fox by Bookjunkie1975

In a contest full of stories exploring deep, dark, and occasionally disturbing, themes, BookJunkie1975 did something no other author was able to do. She wrote something sweet and fluffy and took us all by surprise. The Rabbit and the Fox was so delightfully different it simply had to have a judge's mention for 'sweet relief'.

Review by Sweetp-1

I was giddy to read Bookjunkie1975's words after devouring her OJWard contest entry. She has such a knack for creating relationships between characters. They're so solid, it makes you ponder why they weren't written that way by Mz. Meyer herself!

Also, when someone uses the words "coquettishly' and "rotund" to describe their main characters you know it's going to be a great story.

I knew nothing about this particular flavor of fetish before reading BookJunkie's funny interlude between Ms. Cope and coach Clapp. Now, however, I wish there was a Facebook application that would create a name for my imaginary, fluffy face.

“Shelly twisted and turned in front of the mirror and Norman watched as her long, bushy tail swayed provocatively back and forth with every swing of her full hips.

"What?" she blinked up at him. "Don't you think I'm foxy?" She burst out in a fit of giggles that only grew louder when she inadvertently snorted.”

Maybe it’s the images of my elementary school gym teacher and the office secretary that make this one-shot so hilarious. Maybe it’s the children’s song I know that asks the singer to “shake your bushy tail.” Whatever it is, I am so grateful to Mz. Bookjunkie for braving the dark side of this contest and coming up with something truly taboo and tummy tickling.

Reviewed by Portia Khalo

In a lot of ways this was the bravest and edgiest of all the entries because ‘it went there’. It showed us that even taboos have there funny side and in its own way made fun of us all for seeking the taboo. Very tongue in cheek.

Review by dihenydd


My Heart of Darkness by Einfich Mach

This one shot haunts me. I'll be driving in my Mommy-wagon, trying to remember my to-do list, and suddenly the unspoken threads of the story will seep into my mind. You know it's a good one when it creeps up on you.

Honestly, I don't want to tell you a thing about the plot because I just want you to read it. Devour it and let it sit inside your mind, and slowly sink into your heart, and bleed out from there until you're moved to leave Mz. Mach a review and tell her how magnificently she captured this Bella and her Edward.

I feel like I've peeked at a document i shouldn't have seen, but can't turn away. "It has been a week since she made the offer, and I've woken every night since that afternoon in this condition. Every part of me wants to give in to her request. It is my deepest darkest fantasy, but what moves me more is the idea that I could share it with her."

Go now! Shoo! You have reading to do.

Review by Portia Khalo

There are very few stories I could honestly call chilling. This is absolutely one of them. Bone chilling and horrifyingly intriguing.

Review by morethanmyself

I find it difficult to put into words how this story makes me feel, and yet I know exactly what it does to me. It's beautiful, stirs an immense emotional reaction, and when Edward is dreaming about entering Bella, even on the second read when I know exactly what is happening (which I didn't quite on the first go), it's incredibly arousing. What does that say about me?

Review by vampireisthenewblack

For me this was definitely the story that captured the spirit of the contest the mos. It dealt with a very sensationalist subject in a way that was almost philosophical. I had heard about fetishes like this and they at once repelled and fascinated me. Mostly because I couldn’t understand the motivation. While I still don’t understand on an intellectual or emotional level I think I might have an inkling at a visceral level now.

Review by dihenydd

Shattered Dawn by Nitareality

I love the idea of this story, a viable alternative to Breaking Dawn. It actually feels more plausible and true to the characters, in some ways. But, my favorite thing about Nita's writing, and this story, is her ability to create graphic, gruesome images with only a few words, forcing the reader to fill in the horrific blanks.

Review by morethanmyself

What I really liked about this story was the similarity to really convoluted whodunnits. There was a way to commit the perfect crime and get away with it, but can Edward pull it off. Very cleverly thought out.

Review by dihenydd

Little Foxes by AmelieGray

Written in third person, present tense, and with the most chillingly detached voice I may ever have read; Little Foxes is a look into the lives of two characters: Bree and Riley.

Silently trudging under the weight of a violent past; Bree has come to live with Riley, his parents, and his less than kind brothers. The tale that unfolds from there is one of horror, hesitation, and hopeless hand washing.

There’s a motif that keeps cropping up that gives the almost clinically cold narration a kind of poetic feel - eyes. Bree’s eyes that are always wide, but seeing nothing.

Bree’s eyes with nothing in them. Nothing at all except for brown and black pupil.

The story is told through Riley’s eyes. We see what he doesn’t want to see. We turn away when he turns away. And it’s written with such a matter of fact tone, that when he did wrong, I felt the chill of guilt in my own gut, like I was just as much at fault because I read it.

What I liked most about this piece was that I felt it was the story that walked right up to the line - to so many lines - straightened it’s back, turned it’s nose up, and spread it’s arms to lay out one of the most disturbing things I’ve ever read.

When I was bouncing around ideas for this contest with some of the other judges, one of the things that struck me was the idea of a haunting image as opposed to a simply grotesque image. For me, an image that is tale-telling without being obviously horrendous is much longer lasting and more intensely impacting than the straight-up shock-for-the-sake-of-shocking image.

Think: single child’s shoe on the side of the road (this is the image we started with).

Think: bloody gloves (Little Foxes).

Think: a dirt-stained face and creaky floor boards (Little Foxes).

Think: a fly, half open (Little Foxes).

Think: There is still a film of steam over the window; his fathers shaving cream hovering precariously on the edge. The soap bubbles cling to the bottom of the sink, as his hands stroke up and down his wrists - slowly at first, but building tempo, until his nails are gripping at the skin.

(Little Foxes.)

These are the details that make it real. That stick with you long after reading.

Without ever crossing the line she’s sneering at, or burning the envelope she’s pushing with all her might; AmelieGray meticulously plants some of the most powerful imagery for your eyes as well as your ears. I don’t hesitate to flounce without the slightest hesitation when an author writes about terror with an exploitative pen. But Amelie handles these ideas with careful respect and has captured exactly what I wanted from this contest - the haunting image. The happenings in this story will stay with me for a terrifyingly, long, long time. Read it. But be warned: once you have, you can’t unread it.

Review by Yellowglue


Release by WritingBabe

The thing I loved most about this tale was how the picture prompt chosen was woven so delicately through the whole story. Although it was one of my personal favorite images, it's a difficult one to write directly into a plot line without giving away the ending. WritingBabe did it brilliantly.

There are multiple, subtle, taboos in this piece as well that made me think about what a "taboo' really is. When it's a personal secret, a treasured taboo, it affects only one person. The number of people that carry the secret, however, don't diminish the weight of knowing.

Bella is sneaky here, protective of her battered heart, and is able to accomplish something much like canon Bella's slipping away from Alice and Jasper to meet James at the ballet studio. "She had done it, severed the last tie. And left her heart the only place she could." WritingBabe writes, and the sepia toned words she's woven give way to a red streak.

There's a mystery here, wrapped in Jane Austen's words and tainting the tied-up ending to Bella's narrative. Who is he who gives punishment? I hope there are many, many readers to puzzle on the answer.

Reviewed by Portia Khalo

I'm guessing someone else will probably mention Release, but I had to just pop in and say that this was by far one of the most angst-ridden stories. It hurt so much, but if you're into that sort of thing, it's definitely something you'd love!

Review by Sweet Dulcinea

This contest had more than its fair share of new writers entering and all three were exceptional stories. This one blew us away with its complexity and the way it played on our preconceptions. At first I though it was a vampfic because it seemed so cannon. Then all the twisty little details leave us as confused as Bella. Unlike canon, when Edward New Moons you actually feel like he has really gone (and good riddance). However although Edward (and Jacob) are a constant presence in the story they never actually make an appearance. This is all about Bella and the choices she makes. I loved the ambiguities and uncertainties that were left. I am not a fan of tying everything up over neatly at the end.

Review by dihenydd


Red by 22blue.

RED was an intriguing story that left me wondering. Does Bella stop seeing Edward now that she sees he has a family? What happens after "one"?

Review by rmcrms5

A very sophisticated story elegantly written. Just enough non judgementalism about the erotic asphyxiation to make it edgy. Perfectly paced with nothing superfluous and nothing missing.

Review by dihenydd

Fire, Blood, Truth by vampireisthenewblack

I really enjoyed this story, and selected it as my judge's pick in BtP, because I thought it fit the purpose of the contest very well. It's the story of Alec's change and the way Aro manipulates and possesses him when is he is young -- both as a human and as a vampire -- and what goes through Alec's mind all the while. It's twisty, and it may squick some due to the sexual content, but this author did a great job portraying a taboo vampire situation without making it gratuitous. The entire time I read, I was simply fascinated.

Review by Sweet Dulcinea


Delight, Delectation, Divine by snshyne

Darksper. Need I say more? I found this story to be an interesting and intriguing depiction of an extremely dark Jasper . . . but as a gifted human. It was weird and creepy in parts, and I'd say that near the end, things went far . . . maybe a little too far. But at the same time, that was what made it truly go beyond the pale, into a place where readers might feel uncomfortable; it was a brave choice by the author, but I thought it worked. And the end of this one . . . oooooohh! Loved it!

Review by Sweet Dulcinea

Typically, I don’t read Jasper centric fics, but I have to say how much I loved snshyne’s dark take on him. Given his canon talents, it’s so easy to see how he could fall victim to his ability to sense and manipulate emotions. However, I wouldn’t categorize this particular Jasper as a victim of himself. No, this sinister Darksper was rather intriguing in a delightful and delectable way.

Review by 22blue


Bleeding Out by morethanmyself

This is one of those stories I’m almost afraid to admit to how much I relate to it. But I do. Morethanmyself has braved a subject that could never be talked about with fellow parents or even their own husband – how would a mother and wife be seen who’s outwardly admitted to have been weighed down by the monotony of her own family? It’s not that simple, however, it’s much more. The complexity of the thoughts and feelings of the narrator is palpable and, as I’ve stated, so very relatable.

Review by 22blue

I cannot praise this story highly enough. I found it stunning. However it is hard to say much without giving anything away. Suffice to say that it felt so intensely personal that I felt voyeuristic.

Review by dihenydd


Proxy by MarchHare5

This colored my world in blurry lines of sympathy.

Bella is married to Carlisle whom is unable to perform his husbandly duties in the bedroom. With heartbreak and hope the reader is left at a crossroads.

After the dinner scene we enter the Cullen home where Edward Masen agrees to become Carlisle’s proxy and each fine detail left my heart pounding.

The contest was about pushing the envelope, about tearing down the walls of our own judgment. MarchHare5 certainly gave this complicated affliction the sympathy and enticement it deserved.

Review by luvrofink


The Taste of Blood by InDiscord

The Taste of Blood is a story that explores exactly that - blood play. While the theme might be one that we've all seen before in this fandom, InDiscord cleverly turns it on its head and gives us something unique, and surprisingly...sweet. I know - it's a weird term for a story that explores some fairly squicky subject matter but it's the touching vulnerability of the main characters that stole my attention. Their innocence, and the sense of wonder they share as they explore the limits of their relationship helps this story push right up to the line but it doesn't go over - certainly taboo but still tasteful. The Taste of Blood was InDiscord's first story and I for one am eagerly looking forward to reading more from her.

Review by Sweetp-1

I never thought I would see the day that I described blood play as sweet. Then I read this story. It is very sweet and very hot, in a twisted kind of way.

Review by morethanmyself

I liked this because it really did push some serious limits for me. Blood play I'm good with, it was the blood play while Bella was menstruating that normally would have hit some squick buttons. And yet, it didn't. InDiscord described the act—all of the acts within the story—in a way that made me see the beauty of it. Also, it was beautifully written, the kind of prose that I can read over and over again.

Review by vampireisthenewblack

Creepy – sort of. I liked this one shot, and can definitely see how then end would be the epitome of sexual blood play. Kind of icky, but they found their equals in each other, and I can’t help but wonder what will happen with these two, though?!

Reviewed by 22blue

It's strange how an activity that between vampires is something we have come to accept (yes even the menstruation scene) but changing the protagonists to humans and it suddenly becomes taboo. Very cleverly and sweetly realised.

Review by dihenydd


En Pointe by wombatkat

Bella Swan is the linchpin of a very different sort of treaty between vampires and wolves in wombatkat's "En Pointe." When a dark, dangerous Edward demands her as part of the bargain to keep the peace, Bella seals the treaty by agreeing to be his slave despite Jacob’s protests. Domward appears to have all the cards, whips and restraints, and incorporates Bella’s dread of her ballet lessons into her punishments as his sexual slave, but I suspect this Bella has the power to tame him. Luckily, wombatkat has continued the story, so we’ll get a chance to find out.

Review by writingbabe

Wombatkat already knows this, but I had to set podette down not once, not twice, not three - but four times while reading this story. The things this boy says and does to this girl go above and beyond the call of AU sex appeal.

I’ve never read something so deviant, and so tenderfeeling at the same time.

There’s a slowmoment in this story; a really slowed down moment, that zooms so far in on the contact between Edward and Bella that I almost feel like a voyeur while reading it.

Attention to and respect for a single photo prompt: Check.

Teetering right up to the line without crossing it: Check.

Exploration of and respect for taboo content: Check. Check.

New hottest vampward lemon I’ve ever read: MotherfuckingCheck.

Seeking to teach Bella a lesson about the impossible; Edward is all authority, all dominance, and all the things that are best for Bella - his cut. His earnings after a sort of war. She went willingly, and stays willingly - but she’s his. In every sense of the word.

There’s growling and condescending, and orders and spankings, and oh my goodness gracious the things he says!

“You will get to class on time.”

He gave me a thrust. I moaned at how he filled me.

“You will be a good little pet.”

He pushed twice, hard and fast. I gasped and rolled my hips upward.

“You will study and please me at my leisure.”

Hard and fast and smooth... I felt the fire build in my stomach. Blood dripped from my shoulder and he licked it.

“You will remember your place or I will break the treaty. I will go back there and end that dog you love.”

En Pointe; now two chapters in with plans to continue (la beep!!), is currently at the top of my juiciest, most wonderful AU citrus list. You are totally missing out on the most twitterpated tummy butterflies if you’re not reading this.

Review by Yellowglue


This Woman’s Work by NitaReality

For This Woman’s Work, Mz. Nita plucked her pictorial inspiration from it’s computer-screen frame and placed it perfectly inside her heart-breaking story. Of all the entries I read, this one used the image most effectively and intuitively. “In her perfect little subdivision filled with perfect little soccer moms, sitting alone on her perfect little street, it took 30 minutes for someone to stop and try to speak to her.” She writes, and I feel the disconnection that Bella feels toward her entire neighborhood as a very real cultural wound.

Without giving away too much of the story, please know that Carlisle plays his role perfectly in this tale, and gave my heart a small nugget of peace.

Edward's part in this painful play was a relief too. Nita's characterizations are a keen play on canon; unexpected but entirely needed.

This story brought up so many feelings in me. A Mother’s pain for her children is unbearable on a good day, and the thought that anyone, this Bella included, would have to survive that kind of hurt made me weep. To sabotage your entire life for the sake of your children’s future, even though they’ll hate you, takes a deep kind of bravery.

This is the kind of story that makes me remember why I love fan fiction so much. It reminds me of what I’m capable of, both as a mother and a writer.

Review by Portia Khalo

This story haunted me for days after I read it. It is beautifully written with heartbreaking imagery. One line that stayed with me, “She looked down at her hand, finding it was wrapped tightly around a knife, almost in a lovers caress of an aroused cock; a knife firmly implanted into the life-source of her victim.” What made it taboo is how nitareality perfectly captures the feelings of inadequacy that a woman can feel in everyday life – a feeling that is common but rarely spoken of. Through intermingling past and present storylines, the reader is able to get inside Bella’s head and connect with her and her pain.

Review by arden8283

The Boy Who Came Between Us by Kimmydonn

Very intense and very raw. I found interesting the idea of Alice being so selfless and attuned to her friends, that she was ready to sacrifice her own happiness for the sake of her best friends. It was almost too much how willing she was to give up her own love. Too bad it didn't help. From the beginning, when I learned about Edward's coping mechanism, till the end when he gave up on himself, gave up on his own life, I felt helpless myself. Excellent writing, very well done piece.

Review by Detochkina


The Wait, by netracullen

If there's anything beyond the pale, it's having an affair with your sister's husband. The good sister's husband. The sister who helped you. In netracullen's "The Wait," Edward is married to Bella's sister Alice, but Bella and Edward's attraction is undeniable. Their affair deepens until
Alice's pregnancy forces Edward to make a choice. And he chooses his wife and child. Bella's choice? To wait. That's what I'm doing, too: waiting and hoping netracullen continues this wonderfully moody fiction populated with fascinating, flawed characters. There are no heroes here, just shades of grey. And grey is my favorite color.

Review by writingbabe

I'm not sure I can pinpoint exactly why this story tied my heart up in knots, but it did. The story is a heartbreaking and I think the indefinite ending makes it more so, we're just left with this image of broken and discarded Bella determined to wait forever.
Review by morethanmyself

'The Wait' is a tale brilliantly written - the sentiments weaving through the
story fluidly – with an equally intriguing plot. The author manages to
capture the emotions seamlessly, whilst maintaining the integrity of the
characters. It is a heartbreaking, gut-wrenching tale of blooming love and
the tragic loss of the same. At first glance it may seem like the ideal story
based on adultery, but if you look deeper, you will find that it is so much
more. Truly worth a read, a review and ample appreciation.

Review by obsessed.cheela

Vanishing by SwedenSara

This story, like all the stories in this contest, deals with dark themes. After a traumatic attack by some boys from school,
Alice seeks to find a way to ensure that the same thing doesn't happen again. Hating the way her body has developed she decides that the way her body looks is the one thing that she can have control over.

This story is a very insightful look into the mind of an anorexia sufferer. SwedenSara has obviously had some exposure to this horrible disease and she sensitively details the twists and turns of
Alice's mind. She shows how easy it can be to slide into anorexia.

I was incredibly moved by SwedenSara's story and found myself thinking about it for days afterwards.

Review by Annetteinoz

Not an easy story to read. The assault was dealt with very well - not exploitative yet filling you with a sense of revulsion and anger. The mechanics of the disease are exceptionally well described in terms that make it understandable and make it feel like it has its own internal logic.

Review by dihenydd